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Post by Chronos on Tue Feb 03, 2009 6:15 pm

Name: Cyrus Jisei

Age: 13

Gender: Male

Village: Originally from Kumogakure, Now Iwagakure

Appearance:
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Personality: Generally, Metaru is a calm, controlled nin who very rarely lets his rage get the best of him. He puts his work before his personal life, as his parents had, and he treats his elder with utmost respect. He does not tolerate failure, nor lack of ability, and will rightfully place punishment and blame on those who do not succeed to his standards. Having left his village in a rather crazed manner, Metaru's outlook on life is not the same cold steel as it used to be. He now lives with a lighter heart, possibly due to the fact that he's not entirely sane anymore, only appearing to be. Psychology he is egotistical, to the point where he finds other nin humorous. He also enjoys inflicting trauma, either mentally or physically by constantly changing means of torture. In short, he's an overly complex person, so much so that he shows hints of mental illness, possibly some form of mania.

Element: Earth [Doton] + Lightning [Raiton] = Magnetic [Kinzokuton]

Rank: Chunnin

Skill: Ninjutsu, Chakra Control

Clan: Jisei

Clan History: The clan is as simple as any other, simply a collection of various Cloud nin that have formed a family. The oldest recorded Jisei exists in the books at the founding of the village, keeping the clan's true origin unknown. The man who stood by their first kage's side then created his own family, marrying and having children. Now five generations in, the family has grown larger, it's members having varied techniques naturally based off of the lightning element that is the general nature of the village they occupy. With that being said, the family has just recently produced a Kekkai Genkai of their own, and have done so simply by unwittingly mixing genes.

History:

Born and raised in hidden cloud, Cyrus was the product of an already accomplished ninja family, and thus has grown with a large amount of potential. It was discovered from birth, that the shocking and earthen chakras of his parents had mixed within him and under careful scientific watch, that Cyrus was specifically gifted with chakra control. With scientists running him through many tests, they found that the only test which gave them plausible results, was the chakra nature test, in which a ninja is told to channel his chakra within a small leaf and watch the results in order to learn what his dominant chakra type was. It turned out, that while the first two times Cyrus was presented with the test, the leaf crumpled, clearly telling the scientists that his chakra type was Lightning. However, on the third test, the leaf turned to dust, contradicting the first two, and telling everyone present that his primary elemental chakra was earth. This lead to more testing and the scientists soon discovered a third, all too weird possibility when Cyrus was presented with the leaf. It seemed, that, occasionally, the leaf did not crumple or disintegrate. The third occurrence was something entirely unseen, but after research scientists discovered that it was not quite unheard of in the far western sands. What seemed to have trans passed was the development of a new kekkai genkai, and although this occurrence is rare in the new world, it had indeed seem to have happened. It seemed that though the young Jisei boy had altering dominant chakras, very rarely it would do something entirely different... levitate. Though this was surely a new and undefined chakra nature, there was very little the scientists of Kumogakure could do to pinpoint what exactly his chakra took the form of. Can you imagine trying to get a new born to perform ninjutsu?

Academy Student To First Sensei Arcs.
So on went life, Cyrus was raised in a small home near the outskirts of Kumogakure no Sato by his birth parents Ikusei and Masahiro. As he grew his parents, both members of Cloud's ANBU squad, taught him basic taijutsu and even minor elemental ninjutsu in hopes of prompting his mysterious chakra to be released. Unfortunately, Cyrus went through all of his ninja academy days without discovering this power, although he did graduate top of his class and at an early age. So though he was promising and very adept as a gennin, Cyrus would not discover his new skill for another two years, when he reached the age of ten. It was during a standard training exercise, to better understand reserving chakra during battle and releasing it during hand to hand combat. It seemed that cloud's motto for training their young ninja, was the greater the trainee, the tougher the trainer. Now, though Cyrus's trainer, Mokusei, often got underneath his student's skin, it seemed that the jounin had done an exemplary job of upsetting Cyrus that day. As they locked blades during combat, Mokusei went one step too far, and Metaru immaturely decided to release all his chakra, in a rather angry burst, in attempts to show the man a lesson. Cyrus was admitted to the hospital just under five minutes later, crying out in pain.

He had fifty six puncture wounds, caused by a rough number of the same amount of ninja tools, including kunai, shuriken and senbon. As reports were handed in, it seemed that when Cyrus used such an inexperienced release of chakra, all metal objects in the nearest vicinity had been pulling roughly towards him. The first notable objects were a few clasps and headbands, welts still visible on his skin when he was admitted into the emergency wing. After those looser lighter objects, it seemed that the safely secured weapons his teacher and team mates had on them came next. Having read the report, doctors and scientists soon rushed to their research, concluding that Cyrus's unknown chakra affinity was that of a magnetic nature, it was later dubbed Kinzokuton. Upon hearing the news in recovery, Cyrus spent his remaining days in the hospital attempting to get in touch with this element, and by the end of his stay, he was eating his meals by the use of levitating forks and knives.

Solitary Training Arc.
Now that he had a basic grasp on it, Cyrus went into retreat with his parents, reducing the time anyone had in contact with him to sheer minutes. This time alone was spent honing his chakra and developing competent techniques from it. With help from his parents and teacher, Cyrus developed an all new arsenal of techniques to go along with his others, all in the short time of four years. It was at this age, fourteen, that he was readmitted with his gennin team, who were then entered into the chuunin exams. Though his team passed the initial stages, one of their members did not make it through, and only Cyrus and one of his teammates became the only gennins to graduate in Konoha. (Chunnin Exams held in Konoha)

Nindo: Those who don't obtain greatness have no purpose in life. . .

Likes: Training, Training, Bettering myself at training

Dislikes: Talking, non-training habits

(This is not Cyrus at his current level this would be him in later years)
rp sample: Cyrus's feet hit the ground with a muffled thud, the dew on the damp grass splashing lightly as he did so. Inhaling the fresh air he sighed slightly, it was good to be back. He glanced up from his crouched position, noting his surroundings, keeping Kumogakure's wall at his back. The sun was just starting to rise, setting fire to the morning mist. Though as good as it felt, and that fresh mountain breeze did feel good, it would have to wait.

Silently, he rose to his feet, skirting quickly around the outside wall, looking for the closest and safest place to approach the Kage offices from. The entire time he kept thinking to himself how nice it would be to rule over these mountains once Akatsuki came to power, and how much enjoyment he would get from torturing the insolent Raikage. His thoughts were cut short though, he heard footsteps, deep from the mist. Now although this mist currently hid his position, Metaru drew his stealth technique around him, adding additional defenses. He then placed the footsteps into a deeper recess of his mind, still keeping track of them, though not making them a priority, and continued on with his mission.

Naturally, he could have simply charged in, causing damage and mayhem and stolen the target while the village was still in pandemonium.... but noooo. He had to be professional, or so his leader told him. "You'll never get anywhere being so hot-headed." Blah, blah, blah. Sometimes it seemed like the man simply enjoyed what he thought to be the harmonious sound of his own voice. Though it somewhat was, if you were the type that considered wood chippers harmonious. Cyrus snickered, getting lost in his own jokes at this point. that too was cut short however, as the looming shadow of the Raikage's Office was now blocking the golden shades of light. This would be his entrance, approaching by shadow. It was all just a matter of time now.

Jutsus: (Will put in another post)


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Re: Cyrus Jisei

Post by Shinryu Jin on Fri Feb 06, 2009 5:05 pm

Although this is something in progress, could you please post your KG in the Bloodline/Clan reg section? Also currently the Jounin rank is not available right now, however just maybe if you finish your app in time, you can enter the Chuunin exams that is going on now. Think of it as an opportunity to move up a rank from Genin rather quickly.

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Re: Cyrus Jisei

Post by Chronos on Sun Feb 08, 2009 11:40 pm

All Metal Jutsu are Kekke Genkai Inherited:

Name: Kaneton • Release Hagane Dama [Metal Release • Steel Bullet]
Rank: C
Element: Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: 20 feet
Description: A skill where the user can create pellets of steel within their hands, being able to fire them off towards their opponent and having them fly at relatively high speeds // Chakra Drain 40% per twenty bullets // Dmg 40 per twenty

Name: Kaneton Release • Kagane Yari [Metal Release • Steel Spear]
Rank: C
Element: Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: 20 feet
Description: A skill where the user creates a spear that is five feet long and having a three inch thickness. The tip, is known as an offense tip which is capable of C rank armors and nearly all C rank of ninjutsu barriers. With such a spear, it makes a great tool in battle

Name: Magnetic Release: Metallurgy [Kinzokuton: Yakin]
Rank: C
Element: Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: Within Hand to Mold
Description: Using the mass of compact metal he carries with him and his magnetic chakra, Cyrus can mold the metal into whatever form he pleases. These forms have been shown to vary from swords, shields, whips, spears, and just about anything else he can create with the amount he has.

Name: Earth Flow River [Doton: Doryuu Taiga]
Rank: C
Element:Earth
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: 20 feet
Description: Doryuu Taiga is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Earth Element. The ninja will do the necessary hand seals and transform the ground upon which the enemy stands into a river of mud.

Name: Underground Submarine Voyage [Doton: Dochuu Senkou]
Rank: C
Element:Earth
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range:As far as possible
Description: Dochuu Senkou is a Ninjutsu technique utilizing the Earth Element. After forming the needed hand seals, the ninja will sink below ground and quickly travel through the earth. This differs from the underground Projection Fish technique in that it allows the user to travel quite quickly, and not simply hide. While travelling, the user does overturn soil on the surface, giving away his position.

Name: Lightning Release: Lightning Blast [Raiton: Raikou Bakuha]
Rank: C
Element: Lightning
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: 13 feet
Description: Raikou Bakuha is a Ninjutsu Technique utilizing the Lightning Element. The ninja will do the necessary hand seals then gather chakra in his first and middle fingertips on either hand. He can then fire a thin bolt of lightning with enough power to shortly stun an enemy. The amount of times he can fire this bolt is unlimited, but he needs time to gather chakra between blasts. It takes about twenty second charge, and for the twenty seconds to past he must remain still, so to draw in as much as possible.

Name: Magnetic Release: Binding Minerals [Kinzokuton: Soutei Kouseki]
Rank: C
Element: Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: 20 feet
Description:Using his magnetic chakra, Metaru will raise a hand and close it in the enemies direction. In response, metal from his disk will fly out in a near liquid form, latching onto his enemy. This can either slow down, or completely immobilize an enemy depending on how much material Metaru uses.

Name: Magnetic Release: Positron Field [Kinzokuton: Youdenshi Gen’ya]
Rank: C
Element: Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: 10 feet
Description: Using his magnetic chakra, Metaru will create a weak magnetic field in the palm of his hand. He may then throw it, and proceed to increase it’s potency. The idea is to attract foreign metal objects in the area towards a different target, even an opponent.

Name: Magnetic Release: Iron Body Technique [Kinzokuton: Tetsu Hada no Jutsu]
Rank: C
Element:Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: Body
Description: Using his magnetic chakra, Metaru will mold his metal plate around his body, using a large majority of it. This coating makes it appear as if Metaru were simply a statue, however he can still move by using his control over the metal. This creates an armor for him that is not only quite resistant and a good defensive tactic, the armor also aids in hand to hand. Though useful, this technique has many weaknesses.

Name: Kaneton • Hitei Mushou [Metal Release • Flying Nail Mist Pierce]
Rank: B
Element: Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: 20 feet
Description: Spewing forth a combination of mist and metal from the mouth, it sends a wide variety of flying projectiles towards the opponent. These small metal nails flying fast enough to pierce into wood and able to fully emerse themselves into an opponents body.


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Re: Cyrus Jisei

Post by Chronos on Mon Feb 09, 2009 11:37 am

* 8=* Bump BUmp can comeone check over this PLease!
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Re: Cyrus Jisei

Post by Shinryu Jin on Tue Feb 10, 2009 4:19 pm

Name: Kaneton • Release Hagane Dama [Metal Release • Steel Bullet]
Rank: C
Element: Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: 20 feet
Description: A skill where the user can create pellets of steel within their hands, being able to fire them off towards their opponent and having them fly at relatively high speeds // Chakra Drain 40% per twenty bullets // Dmg 80 per twenty

For the amount of Damage this deals. It should be of an higher rank. The 3rd Kazekage's iron sand technique is a bit like this and its an A-rank jutsu.

Name: Kaneton Release • Kagane Yari [Metal Release • Steel Spear]
Rank: C
Element: Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: 20 feet
Description: A skill where the user creates a spear that is five feet long and having a three inch thickness. The tip, is known as an ultimate offense tip which is capable of piercing all types of armors and nearly all types of ninjutsu barriers. With such a spear, it makes a great tool in battle

For what your suggesting this is capable of, it should be of an higher rank too. And piercing just about anything will depend solely of the defense.

Name: Magnetic Release: Metallurgy [Kinzokuton: Yakin]
Rank: C
Element: Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: Within Hand to Mold
Description: Using the mass of compact metal he carries with him and his magnetic chakra, Cyrus can mold the metal into whatever form he pleases. These forms have been shown to vary from swords, shields, whips, spears, and just about anything else he can create with the amount he has.

Please make this an higher rank. Its too much like the Iron sand technique which is an A-rank.

Name: Lightning Release: Lightning Blast [Raiton: Raikou Bakuha]
Rank: C
Element: Lightning
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: 20 feet
Description: Raikou Bakuha is a Ninjutsu Technique utilizing the Lightning Element. The ninja will do the necessary hand seals then gather chakra in his first and middle fingertips on either hand. He can then fire a thin bolt of lightning with enough power to shortly stun an enemy. The amount of times he can fire this bolt is unlimited, but he needs time to gather chakra between blasts.

Please say how much time he needs to gather chakra. Also the range on this thing is way too far xD.

Name: Magnetic Release: Binding Minerals [Kinzokuton: Soutei Kouseki]
Rank: C
Element: Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: 20 feet
Description:Using his magnetic chakra, Metaru will raise a hand and close it in the enemies direction. In response, metal from his disk will fly out in a near liquid form, latching onto his enemy. This can either slow down, or completely immobilize an enemy depending on how much material Metaru uses.

Are you in control of the technique? And how strong is this bind on your opponents?

Name: Magnetic Release: Positron Field [Kinzokuton: Youdenshi Gen’ya]
Rank: C
Element: Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: 20 feet
Description: Using his magnetic chakra, Metaru will create a weak magnetic field in the palm of his hand. He may then throw it, and proceed to increase it’s potency. The idea is to attract foreign metal objects in the area towards a different target, even an opponent.

This doesn't seem like a weak magnetic field considering what your able to do with it.


Name: Magnetic Release: Metal Clone [Kinzokuton: Kane Bunshin]
Rank: C
Element: Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range:
Description: A powerful clone technique, Metaru's Kane Bunshin technique creates clones out of metal. Though these clones would never pass for a real person, their usefulness in battle is unrivaled by any other clone. Forming the clone out of metal nearby, this bunshin is completely solid straight through, making it one-hundred percent more durable then most other clones. Not only can these clones take hits, they can deal them out even harder, weighing nearly five-hundred pounds each. Though they can't perform any of Metaru's earth jutsu, due to their conductive nature, they're able to channel and create simple lightning jutsu, as well as use their own composing material to attack the opponent with metal techniques. This goes from most of Metaru's metal bound techniques, to even altering their body and limbs.

This particular clone is way to powerful for a simple C-rank xD.

Name: Magnetic Release: Iron Body Technique [Kinzokuton: Tetsu Hada no Jutsu]
Rank: C
Element:Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: Body
Description: Using his magnetic chakra, Metaru will mold his metal plate around his body, using a large majority of it. This coating makes it appear as if Metaru were simply a statue, however he can still move by using his control over the metal. This creates an armor for him that is not only quite resistant and a good defensive tactic, the armor also aids in hand to hand, and allows Metaru to charge through practically anything given enough momentum. Though useful, this technique has many weaknesses.

Please up the rank for this one


Name: Magnetic Release: Flight Technique [Kinokuton: CHikuden no Jutsu]
Rank: C
Element: Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: Air
Description: Using his magnetic chakra, Metaru can create and control magnetic pulses to allow himself to levitate. By then creating more pulses from his hands he can move freely, allowing him to fly. Metaru can also perform this technique for two people, however it’s more difficult to control someone else’s flight patterns, and it will take him nearly twice as much chakra.

Sorry but we're not allowing this one xD


Name: Magnetic Release: Pulse Technique [Kinzokuton: Purusu no Jutsu]
Rank: C
Element: metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: 20 feet
Description: Using his magnetic chakra, Metaru will push his hand forward and release a small condensed pulse of magnetic energy. This energy will force objects back whether they are metal or not as it naturally gives them a charge. He can control the direction of this pulse and where he generates it from, all by changing his hand motion, i.e. Push objects towards him, pull hand towards him. Throw objects upwards, throw hand upwards.


Sorry but we're not allowing this one. It's too much like a certain jutsu out there xD

Name: Kaneton • Hitei Mushou [Metal Release • Flying Nail Mist Pierce]
Rank: C
Element: Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: 20 feet
Description: Spewing forth a combination of mist and metal from the mouth, it sends a wide variety of flying projectiles towards the opponent. These small metal nails flying fast enough to pierce into wood and able to fully emerse themselves into an opponents body.

Up the rank on this one please

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Post by Chronos on Wed Feb 11, 2009 4:00 pm

Ok I changed most of the stuff you requested, but wanted to exsplain a little more on some . . . .

Name: Magnetic Release: Iron Body Technique [Kinzokuton: Tetsu Hada no Jutsu]
Rank: C
Element:Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: Body
Description: Using his magnetic chakra, Metaru will mold his metal plate around his body, using a large majority of it. This coating makes it appear as if Metaru were simply a statue, however he can still move by using his control over the metal. This creates an armor for him that is not only quite resistant and a good defensive tactic, the armor also aids in hand to hand, and allows Metaru to charge through practically anything given enough momentum. Though useful, this technique has many weaknesses.

On this jutsu Im not making the metal from thin air. If you would look in the weapons creation area I made a type of metal back plate, this would be used to allow the metal to cover my bpdy, seing that is pretty thick.

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Name: Magnetic Release: Positron Field [Kinzokuton: Youdenshi Gen’ya]
Rank: C
Element: Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: 20 feet
Description: Using his magnetic chakra, Metaru will create a weak magnetic field in the palm of his hand. He may then throw it, and proceed to increase it’s potency. The idea is to attract foreign metal objects in the area towards a different target, even an opponent.

On this one the whole point is to make the field look small until I throw it thats when it gets bigger and starts to bring in smaller objects like Kunai shuriken and etc.

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Name: Magnetic Release: Binding Minerals [Kinzokuton: Soutei Kouseki]
Rank: C
Element: Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: 20 feet
Description:Using his magnetic chakra, Metaru will raise a hand and close it in the enemies direction. In response, metal from his disk will fly out in a near liquid form, latching onto his enemy. This can either slow down, or completely immobilize an enemy depending on how much material Metaru uses.

This depends, on how much chakra I use and the amount of metal I have. yes im in control and this would probably be able to hold a person of Chunnin or lower ranking.

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Name: Magnetic Release: Metallurgy [Kinzokuton: Yakin]
Rank: C
Element: Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: Within Hand to Mold
Description: Using the mass of compact metal he carries with him and his magnetic chakra, Cyrus can mold the metal into whatever form he pleases. These forms have been shown to vary from swords, shields, whips, spears, and just about anything else he can create with the amount he has.

This jutsu only works with the low amount of liquid metal that I have tried creating in the weapons area along with the metal plate. So yea, I can only make like two small objects and maybe one short sword like object.
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Post by Chronos on Wed Feb 11, 2009 4:25 pm

^ &^ Bump Bump
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Post by Shinryu Jin on Wed Feb 11, 2009 4:43 pm

Name: Magnetic Release: Iron Body Technique [Kinzokuton: Tetsu Hada no Jutsu]
Rank: C
Element:Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: Body
Description: Using his magnetic chakra, Metaru will mold his metal plate around his body, using a large majority of it. This coating makes it appear as if Metaru were simply a statue, however he can still move by using his control over the metal. This creates an armor for him that is not only quite resistant and a good defensive tactic, the armor also aids in hand to hand, and allows Metaru to charge through practically anything given enough momentum. Though useful, this technique has many weaknesses.

On this jutsu Im not making the metal from thin air. If you would look in the weapons creation area I made a type of metal back plate, this would be used to allow the metal to cover my bpdy, seing that is pretty thick.

I take what your saying into consideration. But when you say stuff like "charge through practically anything given enough momentum". It makes it sound like it should be of an higher rank xD.


Name: Magnetic Release: Positron Field [Kinzokuton: Youdenshi Gen’ya]
Rank: C
Element: Metal
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: 20 feet
Description: Using his magnetic chakra, Metaru will create a weak magnetic field in the palm of his hand. He may then throw it, and proceed to increase it’s potency. The idea is to attract foreign metal objects in the area towards a different target, even an opponent.

On this one the whole point is to make the field look small until I throw it thats when it gets bigger and starts to bring in smaller objects like Kunai shuriken and etc.

If your only pulling in Kunai and Shurikens, then it should be ok. But at least tone down the range a little. All of your jutsus seem to circulate around the 20ft range xD. Even the lower level ones.

Name: Lightning Release: Lightning Blast [Raiton: Raikou Bakuha]
Rank: C
Element: Lightning
Skill: Ninjutsu
Range: 20 feet
Description: Raikou Bakuha is a Ninjutsu Technique utilizing the Lightning Element. The ninja will do the necessary hand seals then gather chakra in his first and middle fingertips on either hand. He can then fire a thin bolt of lightning with enough power to shortly stun an enemy. The amount of times he can fire this bolt is unlimited, but he needs time to gather chakra between blasts.

You still didn't edit this one xD.

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Post by Chronos on Thu Feb 12, 2009 2:25 pm

Ok Fixed and edited. Hopefully for the last time.
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Post by Shinryu Jin on Thu Feb 12, 2009 2:59 pm

Approved.

Are there any objections?

Also please shorten the range on that Lightning blast technique xD. After you've done that, then it will be official.

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Post by Chronos on Fri Feb 13, 2009 2:00 pm

Done and Now it's Official
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